The Lofty Views of a Mouse

Published November 13, 2016 by nruhwald

brainThe evening began so well. After the hub-bub of Sunday’s frenzy, Oakwood Fellowship was finally quiet enough for the three mice to head over to their favorite spot in the receptionist’s station next to the Lost-and-Found box.

Ricky carried a communion cup fill with apple juice left over from the nursery snacktime, plunked it on the floor within easy reach, and settled down on a holey mitten.

Lena and Meg continued their discussion as they climbed up into the cupboard.

“Because, you know how humans only use ten percent of their brains?” said Lena.

Meg’s ear twitched.

“Oh boy.” Ricky hid his smile in the cup of apple juice.

Meg hopped up on an empty box of Dove soap. “Excuse me?”

“You know, on the scans. Only ten percent of the brain lights up,” Lena said. “On average.”

“I beg your pardon. Humans do not use ten percent of their brains. They may, or may not, use ten percent of their brains at a time, depending on what they are doing. But different parts of the brain are used for different things. People don’t do everything at once.”

“Well maybe, but-”

“-but nothing. For instance, a person cannot use every part of their house at once. Does that mean some parts of the house are unused? No, that’s dumb.”

“Well, you could get more stuff done if you could be in every room at once.”

“The brain doesn’t work like that.”

“So your analogy doesn’t work.”

“People don’t work like that either.”

“But if they did…”

Meg smoothed her whiskers in an effort to stay calm.

Ricky took another sip of apple juice.

“The point is,” Meg said. “People do, at some point during the day, use all the parts of their brain. There is no secret reservoir of untapped brainpower.”

“Well, whatever,” said Lena.

Meg gave a dismissive flick of her tail and scurried over to the smartphone. Someone lost it in the ladies washroom two months ago, and had never come back for it.

“You’re drinking all the juice,” said Lena.

“Well have some then,” said Ricky.

“Although.” Meg’s brow furrowed as she flipped through her Facebook newsfeed with quick, dexterious motions of her paw. “You may have a point.”

via Daily Prompt: Lofty


8 comments on “The Lofty Views of a Mouse

  • I like the idea of this story but I spotted a few grammar mistakes and I felt like the mice could have had more character quirks to them- physical description, age- and a bit more humor. I did enjoy the read the little things such as stroking the whiskers and flicking the tails, but I wish the conversation topic was more intricate.

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    • Thanks for your feedback. I tend to be a stickler for grammer myself, so I’m a bit surprised at that comment. I don’t suppose it would be too much trouble for you to point out what errors you saw? Sometimes what is a grammatical error to one person can be a matter of style to another. But you’re right, it would benefit from more character description.


    • Thank you. I’ve always wanted to explore ideas that don’t directly relate to writing in my blog, but wasn’t sure how. The idea of three opinionated mice didn’t occur to me until recently, but I’m sure the concept of using short fiction to explore scientific, or political ideas, came from reading your blog.


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